visor, a photo from Victoria, East

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david (3992) 2006-05-24 10:09

alternative title: "self portrait in shiny visor"

i like your shot rowan, but i would ahve resisted the urge to make it a wide shot, instead going vertical and cropping out the helmets on either side.

a lower angle would have removed the base and also included your reflection more clearly.

nice b&w tones and a really great idea for a shot ... but i think it's crying out to be done vertically.

i did a really simple workshop, just for comparison!

[2] [workshop] [compare] +

cbeardmore (68) 2006-05-24 22:55

Nice photo. Great idea, sharp lines and good choice for B&W. Personally I prefer the wider shot, it places the distorted view into a sub-focus of the photo which adds to the mystery of the scene.

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jinju (14265) 2006-05-25 3:29

Hi Rowan

I think David's crops work well to focus your compo. Other than that I really like it. Sharp, shiny, super tones again anda cool idea.

Luko (14000) 2006-05-25 6:58

I think David said it all : the vertical cropped image was the way to go, certainly with that nice bike silhouette populating the background.

Propofol (1790) 2006-05-25 9:15

Great idea!

Very sharp focus and the B&W treatment works very well. The comments above about cropping are useful I think, and add a bit to strengthen the image.

Well done - TFS!

oochappan (4880) 2006-06-01 4:48

Even a square crop was a possibility to avoid the non-informative right side and it would outcenter you to a strong spot. It inspires a lot, so it means that the idea has a lot of capacity and the B&W is excellent contrasted.
greetings from Henk

yigalco (372) 2006-06-30 4:42

Hi Rowan,
Great B&W photo, Very sharp and focus
In general the idea is great and I like the implementation

Regards,
Yigal